Outlander Leander Vol.2.5 – Chapter 3

Beneath the Curtains

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When I opened my eyes I was in the same spot. No light was coming in from the window. I mentally groaned, shoving my face into the pillow and hoping I could fall back asleep quickly.
Something creaked in the hallway. My body tensed. My ear snapped to attention.
The door knob jiggled but it was locked. Time stood still while I focused on the door. Moments later the footsteps continued down the hallway – slow and quiet. I crawled out of the bed and crept over to the door, pressing my ear to it. They stopped next door. I heard the rattle of another door knob. It didn’t open. They continued to the other side of the hall, testing the doors over there. My racing heart was grateful when all of them were locked.
I strained my ears. They walked back up the hall, eventually fading into silence.
I glanced at the bed. Valli was still curled up, sleeping peacefully. He was my friend, but he wasn’t the person I’d turn to in a situation like this.
Nudging the door open, I half expected someone to be waiting on the other side even though I heard them leave. A veil of darkness covered the hallway. I stepped out and closed the door behind me, going next door to Ellora’s room.
My entire body was shaking when I knocked. I waited, and knocked again. I didn’t want to knock too loud and draw attention.
After a bit Ellora’s voice demanded, “Who is it?”
“Shh,” I hushed her, whispering through the door, “It’s me. I just heard someone walking through the hallway.”
The door clicked and she opened it. “Are you sure you weren’t dreaming?”
“I’m positive. Someone came down here and tried to open all of the doors, but they were locked,” I told her. “They went back down the hall.”
She disappeared in her room momentarily before coming back with a metal rod.
“Good, you can cover me,” I said.
“And who will cover me?” she asked.
I scowled at her.
“I figured I could run away while you took care of them,” I answered.
“Shh!”
We slinked through the hallway. I could barely see anything but I kept my ears alert. We made it down the living quarters without spotting anyone. None of the doors were open. We turned to the theater.
Every step I took I worried about making too much noise. The carpet squished under my feet and muffled the sound of the wood creaking underneath.
Light shone from the other side of the theater, somewhere back where the kitchen was. It flicked off while we were inching towards it. Ellora stood ready with her rod up. A creak on the other side of the theater sent a chill through me.
Ellora stayed near the wall and I kept near her right side. I listened for anymore creaking but heard nothing. We got a couple feet away from the end of the wall.
Someone swiveled around the corner with arms held straight, “Freeze!”
I jumped back. Ellora raised the rod. All three of us stayed in position. We didn’t even take a breath. The stranger reached to the side with one hand while holding the gun in the other and flicked the lights on. It was Aliseam. Her gun was fixed on us.
“What are you doing out here?” she demanded.
Ellora nodded her head towards me. “He heard someone walking down the hallway and trying to open doors.”
She lowered her gun. Ellora exhaled.
“That was me,” she admitted. “I couldn’t sleep. So I thought I’d make sure everyone locked their doors and check the theater.”
She slid the gun back in its holster. Ellora let the rod hang by her side.
“Couldn’t sleep because of the murder?” I asked.
She put her fingers to her forehead, plunking down in a nearby seat.
“I talked to her parents yesterday. I promised them we’d find out who did it.”
That’s right. Aliseam was a guard, so she worked with the victim.
“I don’t really like the idea of a murderer walking around, either. Do you have any idea what happened?” Ellora asked.
“Not yet, but talking through it might help.”
“Did it sound like the police have any idea?” I asked.
“Not yet. They aren’t sure where she died and it sounds like she was stabbed in the heart with something long and sharp.”
“One of Valli’s hair sticks,” I stated.
Her eyes flicked up at me. “They found the weapon?”
“Someone took it from Valli’s room. We found it yesterday covered in something, but we didn’t realize it was blood until later,” I explained. A pained look crossed her face. “We already turned it over to the police,” I added.
“So there’s a robbery attached to the murder?” She put a hand to her chin.
“Yeah, he left it on his desk before the show and it was gone after the show.”
“Hmm.” Aliseam leaned forward, resting her chin on her hands. “Maybe it was a robbery gone bad, then. Valli’s hair pins are pretty recognizable. If Visrial saw someone with one of them she might have confronted them.”
“Did anyone see her after the show?” Ellora asked.
“No. I thought she went home, but no one actually saw her leave. Chances are she was killed around here somewhere.”
“I wonder when it happened then. There would have been a lot of people around during the show…”
“She was on duty in the lobby during the show, so she would have spent most of the time in the front and occasionally walked through the back to make sure no one was trying to sneak in.”
“Does that happen often?” I asked.
Ellora gave me a pointed look. “No. Not a lot of people are stupid enough to try and break into the theater.” I narrowed my eyes at her.
Aliseam mused aloud, “I guess it could have happened in the lobby while everyone was inside watching, but there would have still been gift shop workers around.”
“It’s hard to imagine getting away with murder with so many people around,” I said.
She let out a hefty sigh, slumping forward. “I just don’t get it. No one had any reason to kill her, and she was doing so good. She had her own place and she just met someone.”
I perked my ears up. “She just met someone?”
“One of the cooks here,” she said, then laughed softly. “She said it was perfect because she couldn’t cook at all.”
I furrowed my brows, wanting to press further but not wanting to offend her, “Do you think they…?”
She sighed. “I considered it, but I can’t see him doing anything like that. Besides, he’s one of the cooks. They’d notice him missing pretty fast if he wasn’t in the kitchen.”
Keeping him in mind, I nodded. A silence fell over us until Ellora broke it.
“I don’t know about you two but I’m exhausted and there’s a show tomorrow. I’m going back to bed.”
My eyes felt like weights were attached to them.
“I’m tired, too,” I admitted. “At least I know no one is trying to break into the rooms.”
“I doubt I’ll be able to get to sleep. I’m going to keep an eye out for a bit,” she said. I nodded.
Ellora went back before me. I didn’t wait long to shamble back to Valli’s room and lock the door behind me. He was still curled up. I tiptoed back to the bed and nestled under the blankets.

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Outlander Leander Vol.2.5 – Chapter 2

Beneath the Curtains

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I browsed the selection of hair sticks at the senior consignment shop. All of the goods in the store were produced by retirees who took up a craft as a hobby. Buying the goods helped the elderly, and Dad taught me that it was good to help them supplement their savings now that people lived a long time.
At some point the senior consignment shops built a reputation for being high-end stores. The products varied in quality, but because they were hobbyists they were mostly handmade with a lot of time and care spent on them.
That meant prices were high, too. More than I’d normally pay for a hair stick.
I bit my lip and inspected them, trying to decide if I should go with one that was the same color or the same style. One was a puff of a flower, round and fluffy, but it was purple. Another had the same vibrant yellows and oranges but had longer, pointier petals.
I settled on getting yellow with tiny rubies in the middle of the flower. I questioned my choice as soon as I picked it up, but I had to pick something or I’d be there all day.
So I bought it and made my way to the theater.
A guard waved me in at the front and I strolled through the empty lobby. I heard chatter from the stage so I went through the door that led to the seats. Ellora and Seolian took center stage with a director on the floor in front of them. I only knew Seolian as a popular comedian. Other actors and dancers were hanging out in the curtains.
“You wouldn’t understand. Love is painful.” Ellora turned away from Seolian and wrapped her arms around herself, her expression pained.
“I wouldn’t have a clue.” Seolian held a hand to her chest and tilted her head towards the seats, giving the invisible audience a knowing look.
“Stop!” the director yelled. “Do it again but bigger, Seolian. Your heart hurts.”
“Bigger?” she repeated, cocking an eyebrow, hands on her hips. The director gestured widely with her hands, encouraging her.
Ellora stretched and repeated her actions.
“I wouldn’t have a clue.” Seolian grabbed her chest and fell over.
Ellora paused in shock before cracking up.
“Not that big,” the director said.
Seolian rolled her head to the side and opened one eye. “Too much?”
I spotted Valli in the curtains and jogged up to the stage, climbing up the side. I received some glances before being recognized.
“Leander, what are you doing here?” Valli asked. Today a pair of small blue flowers were clipped to either side of his head.
I hesitated. A lot of people were around and I wasn’t sure if I had picked well. Digging the hair stick out of my jacket, I held it out. “I got this for you.”
“Oh!” He threw his hands up over his mouth before gently plucking the stick from my hands. “Thank you! That’s so sweet.”
At least it had been worth the money. We waded through the curtains and sat down. I held the stick for him when he went to practice with the other dancers. After they were done the performers wandered backstage. I joined Valli on the side of the stage. Ellora stayed back with us, rubbing her shoulder.
“I don’t usually get to see the rehearsals,” I said.
“It gets old doing the same scenes over and over,” Ellora said, “but at least we don’t have to rehearse that much right now. This play is pretty straightforward. Not that many tricks.”
“The dance routines are more traditional, too,” Valli added.
“What’s the hardest thing you guys have to do?”
“I think it’s when we have to hold an unusual position for a long time. Like when we played ghosts and walked in a crouched position with our legs far apart,” Valli said.
“I’d say it’s when I have to run to the back while the conveyor belt is going. Having something move under you while you’re running can throw you off balance.”
From the middle of the stage there was a straight section that shot all the way to the back of the room, through the audience seating.
“You mean down that?”
“Yeah. And crawling through the tunnel back to the stage can be irritating, too. It doesn’t get cleaned down there too often.”
“I never need to go down there,” Valli said.
“Consider yourself lucky. It’s cramped.”
“How big is it?” I asked, starting down the walkway in the middle.
“There’s an opening to it right here.” Ellora stopped me. Like the conveyor belt, the trap door blended perfectly with the ground. I’d have never known if she didn’t tell me.
She knelt down by it while I started to walk back. She pried it open with her fingers, revealing an opening about two feet wide. Before I made it back to her she screamed and tumbled backwards. I froze. Valli jumped in place. I’d never heard her react like that before.
When Valli stepped forward she threw up an arm to keep him away. What did she see? Curiosity compelled me to go forward while unease held me back. Ellora was not one to scream lightly.
“What is it?” I asked.
“Call the police,” she stammered. “There’s a body in there!”
Chaos struck. Valli ran out the door. Ellora stayed near the opening, still on her butt. I hesitated to approach. There was a draw to see what she was talking about, but I didn’t want to see something that would haunt me. She had to be wrong. How could there be a body?
The next few hours blurred together. The theater was overrun with police interrogating people. I ended up in the back of the theater with everyone else. My interrogation was short since I didn’t even know the victim. People were separated and questioned alone, but it didn’t look like they found a suspect.
Listening to what was going on, I determined that the victim had been one of the guards.
They recorded the lobby and the back areas to make a virtual model of the scene. Everyone was asked to leave all items as they were until they finished. The only areas they didn’t bother with were the basement, tech room and living quarters.
It felt like a dream.
It was late afternoon by the time people were allowed to leave. Some of the guards went with the police for further questioning. The stage was roped off. They were going to be allowed to continue using the stage but they couldn’t use the trap door.
I rejoined Valli after the police left. The people who stayed formed little groups and spoke in hushed voices amongst themselves. Ellora wasn’t anywhere to be seen.
“Did you hear anything about what happened?” I asked him.
“Not much. I don’t think they want to let the details out yet.”
“It looks like they didn’t make a recording of every place in here.”
“Well, the guards never go in the tech room or the basement, and she didn’t live on location, so there wasn’t any reason for her to be in any of those places. It looked like they were spending a lot of time on the left side of the stage, too. Maybe they found something there.”
Stage left was close to the kitchen area.
“Did you know her?”
“I can’t say I knew her well… The guards are almost always in the front or in the lobby. They only patrol through the back once in awhile, so I don’t see most of them much besides Aliseam.”
“Aliseam? Wasn’t she…” I trailed off. The name sounded familiar.
“She lives on site, so you probably met her yesterday.”
That placed her. When I knocked on the doors I had a brief introduction to everyone who lived there.
I looked around the room. “Hey, where did Ellora go, anyway?”
“Maybe she went back to her room?”
“During all this?”
He glanced away, ears lowered. “Maybe we should check on her. To make sure she’s okay.”
I nodded. We headed to her room.
The pile of papers was messily stacked on the desk. It was about a foot high. No wonder it had fallen. She was sorting through them with a look of irritation etched on her face.
“Are you all right over here?” Valli asked when he walked inside.
Her expression softened for him. She nudged a metal rod leaning on the desk next to her. “If anyone tries to take me by surprise I’ll be ready for them.”
I knew well from experience that she wouldn’t hesitate to swing.
“Okay. I’m going to be in my room with Leander.”
The afternoon was surreal. We talked about the murder, and when we switched subjects it came with a sensation of guilt. How could we chat away when someone had just been killed? But I didn’t want to scare Valli or obsess over something we didn’t have any answers for.
I finished a piece of bread he’d given me and tossed the wrapper in his trash bin. When my eyes locked on it a shudder ran down my back. The filthy hair stick was in there. Yesterday I wasn’t sure what it was covered in but now I had a guess.
“Valli.” I nearly reached in the bin but stopped myself. “We should call the police. We found your hair stick on the stage yesterday.”
He seemed to shrink when I mentioned it. “You think it’s connected?”
“It was covered in something, remember?”
Silence fell on us. I didn’t want to say what I thought it was covered in.
We called the police and explained what happened. They came to Valli’s room and took pictures of the trash bin before collecting it. We took them over to where we found it on the stage and told them everything we could. After another strenuous hour they were leaving with the evidence.
On the way back to Valli’s room he stopped in front of his door. His face paled. I knitted my brows as he clenched his hand and brought it in front of his mouth.
“What’s wrong?” I asked.
“I can’t believe a murderer was lurking in our hallway,” he answered. His eyes widened and he placed his hands on his cheeks. His pitch rose, “And they broke into my room.”
Swiveling to face him, I placed my hands on his shoulders. “It’s okay; I’m here. You’re safe. The police have… they have the murder weapon now. They can get fingerprints off of it.”
“What if they’re still around tonight?” He stared at me, his body stiff.
“Don’t worry.” I paused. Not wanting to sound pushy, I offered awkwardly, “I could stay here tonight.”
He turned his eyes up at me. Even though he was still a hair taller than I was, he was curling up, holding himself. “You don’t have to do that. I don’t want to put you out.”
“It’s not putting me out. I’d feel better if I knew you were okay.”
He smiled softly at me. I was glad I could give him some comfort.
“I’ll just have to get some stuff from home and let Dad know I’m staying the night here.”
He took in a deep breath and straightened up, calming.
“All right. When do you want to do that?”
“I can go right now.” I took his hand and led him to the back of the theater. “I’ll be back in awhile. Make sure you stay with everyone.” He nodded. As long as he was with a group of people I wasn’t worried about anything happening to him.
I went home and grabbed some clothes, then plopped down in front of the v-phone. I had a newer one that Dad got me for my birthday but I didn’t need to hold our home v-phone.
Dad popped up on the video.
“Leander,” he greeted me with a smile.
“Hi, Dad. I just wanted to let you know I was going to spend the night at the theater.”
“Oh?” he hummed curiously.
“Yeah.” My expression fell. “One of the guards was found dead today.”
“Oh?” His tone dropped. He placed an arm on the desk in front of him and leaned forward. “What happened?”
“We’re not sure yet, but I’m going to go stay with Valli so he’s not alone.”
He stayed serious, but there was a brief hint of a smile before it vanished. “Make sure you lock the door. And don’t walk around alone.”
I nodded. “I will.”
“If anything happens call the police.”
I nodded.
“And, if something is wrong, you know how to get a hold of Ryki. Keep your phone on you.”
I nodded again. I didn’t want to bother Rykiel if I didn’t have to. “I will.” I placed a hand on the table, ready to get up.
“And don’t forget to take your toothbrush.”
I let out an exasperated sigh. “I won’t.”
“I love you. Stay safe.”
“I love you, too.”
I shoved everything in my bag – adding a toothbrush and some toothpaste – and went back to the theater.
Valli was still in the back with a small group of people. The crowd had dwindled down to about two dozen. I walked over to him with my bag slung over my shoulder. He spotted me before I reached him and broke away from his group to join me.
“Do you want to head back to my room?” he asked.
“Sure, I could set my stuff down there.”
Valli and I ate with a couple of the other residents then took turns using the shower and getting ready for bed. He had a lengthy nightgown that was mostly white with hints of blue. I threw on a long shirt and pants.
When I came out of the shower his hair was loose and hanging over his shoulders without anything in it. I sat on the edge of the bed behind him.
“You don’t have any flowers in your hair. I’ve practically seen you naked,” I teased.
He giggled, dismissively waving at me with a hand.
We played cards until nature turned the lights off. I checked to make sure his door was locked before we curled up in bed. I’d only slept in the same bed as my dad before, and it had been a long time, so this was different. Valli slept on the left side, farther from the door, nestled under the covers. He was curled up facing me.
I lied on my side facing the door. I melted into the soft, warm sheets. Soon my consciousness faded.

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Outlander Leander Vol.2.5 – Chapter 1

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Beneath the Curtains

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The girl froze on the stage. Thousands of eyes were fixed on her. Music played but she was paralyzed. Mute. Even from the balcony I could sense her fear.
“I hope they don’t make her stand there for too long,” I whispered to Valli. He glanced at me with a pained smile. His expression was barely visible in the dim lights. A vibrant pink flower was pinned an inch above his ear and his bangs fell in layers around his face, much shorter than the rest of his hair.
I turned my attention back to the stage and cringed in sympathy.
“Control, have to stay in control…”
A fearless and familiar voice filled the theater. It wasn’t the girl. Ellora strode out from behind the curtains with a microphone in hand. The girl whirled to face her. The song began softly and built up slowly.
Ellora stopped next to the girl on stage as she reached the chorus. The casual jacket and pants she wore showed she hadn’t been planning on performing. With a wave of her hand, she prompted the girl to join her. A second voice weakly joined hers in the chorus. As they sang on the voice became stronger, clearer.
The chorus ended and the girl continued into the second verse. Her voice was powerful, smooth, and while she sang Ellora slunk back, disappearing behind the curtains.
After she belted out the last note everyone clapped. I put my hands together for her. It was the nicest thing I’d ever seen Ellora do.
With the last audition finished, people flooded out of the seats below us.
“Thanks for inviting me,” I told Valli while we waited for the people to clear. “It’s nice to get such good seats.”
“It’s nothing. I enjoy having someone else here with me,” he answered.
It paid to know someone in the theater. Valli invited me to many auditions and occasionally gave me free tickets for a show.
Trotting a step behind him, we went downstairs to the lobby. Hundreds of people loitered there, chatting and wandering into the gift shops. The entire theater was maroon, from the lobby to the living quarters. Woven posters from previous plays covered the walls. The massive area was littered with cushy seats and decorative plants.
“That was quite the ending,” I said.
“You don’t see that happen every day,” Valli agreed.
Around us heads started turning. I looked to see what was grabbing their attention. Ellora had entered the lobby. Her hair was parted in a way that favored her right side and hung to her mid-back. Her skin had always been a few shades darker than mine, but I had always been a bit lighter brown than average. She had a dark blue jacket on despite the fine weather, and some dark pants to go with them.
People migrated her way but she barreled through them straight over to us and stopped, folding her arms with eyes on Valli.
“Are you heading back inside?” she asked.
“Sure, in a minute,” he answered.
“I’m surprised you went out on stage like that. I’ve never seen you do that before,” I said.
“I saw her practicing in the back so I knew she had talent,” she stated, huffing. “Not like that third guy. That was painful to watch. I couldn’t wait for them to get him off the stage.”
“Think she’ll be accepted?” I asked.
“No.”
Her response was so sharp it startled me.
“We can’t have people freezing up on stage. Maybe if she gets some experience and tries again next year,” she explained. More people took notice of Ellora and she pointed towards the door that led to the back. A large guard in pink stood next to it.
“I’m going to head back in before things get chaotic.”
Valli nodded and she left.
“Shall we head in, too?” he asked me.
“Sure.”
After knowing Valli for a few months I didn’t feel awkward at the theater anymore. I followed him into the back area, already knowing that he was heading to the living quarters. A hallway attached the two areas together in the back.
The living quarters was same the length as the theater but wasn’t nearly as wide. It was a hallway with rooms and recreational areas. Valli’s room was the second one from the end, on the right. The same carpeting that cover the theater floor extended all the way through the halls, but they decorated their rooms however they wanted.
“Actually, I had a favor I wanted to ask of you,” he began hesitantly.
“Oh?” I perked up my ears.
“You find things, right? I was wondering if you could help me find my hair stick?” He fidgeted with his fingers.
I looked for relics or historical artifacts, but looking at his shining eyes and tentative expression, I couldn’t help but smile. “Sure, I’ll help. Where did you last leave it?”
He clasped his hands together and brightened. “I took it off before the show last night and left it on my desk, but it was gone when I came back.”
The carpet in front of his room squished under my feet with a wet sound. I stumbled back.
“Sorry, someone spilled some juice there last night and I had to use one of those cleaners to get it out.”
“Ah, I see,” I answered. We walked around the wet spot and into the bedroom.
His room was tidy with light blue décor. The furniture was all made of a matching light wood, and his bed was plush and oversized for one man. Doors led to his personal washroom and bathroom on the same side. The room was large. Even with a desk, dressers and the bed there was plenty of space left.
I glanced down at the desk sitting next to the entrance. “So you left it here?”
“Yes, right before the show.”
“What did it look like?”
He held up his hands to show its size. “The pin was about seven inches long and had an orange and yellow flower on the end, with a couple tiny rubies inside.”
I knelt down by the desk and checked behind it. Nothing. I pulled myself back up.
“Did you check your washroom? Maybe you moved it at some point and forgot.”
“I looked all over but I haven’t found it anywhere.”
Flipping up the skirt of the bed, I peeked under. Clear. Valli kept his hands folded while he watched.
“Could someone have borrowed it?”
“I don’t think anyone would have taken it without asking first.”
Slumping down on the edge of the bed, I held my chin and mulled it over.
“How much was it worth?”
“About fifty shills, I suppose.”
“And nothing else is missing?”
“I haven’t noticed anything.”
It was a decent amount for a hair stick but not enough to risk a criminal record, especially if they didn’t take anything else.
“I guess the best thing to do would be to ask if anyone else knows anything, then. I’ll go see what I can find out.”
First, Ellora. It was possible she… no, she actually liked Valli. She wouldn’t steal from him. Me, maybe, but not him.
I went to the next room and knocked on her door. She opened it, a look of irritation plastered on her face. Papers were scattered all over the floor. Some had been piled together but the pages weren’t lined up with each other.
“What?” she spat.
“Did something happen in here?” I asked, looking past her.
“A pile of my scripts fell off my desk.” She sighed, exasperated.
“That’s a lot of papers.”
“I have a lot of scripts. What do you want?”
“Valli can’t find one of his hair sticks. Have you seen it anywhere?”
“Which one is it?”
“He said it was orange and yellow.”
“I think he was wearing that the other day.”
“Yeah, he took it off before the show and it was gone from his desk after the show. Was there anyone back here during the show?”
She folded her arms and leaned on the door frame, looking to the side with furrowed brows.
“No one should have been…”
“Any ideas?”
“If he left his door open maybe someone took it because they had the opportunity.”
Unlike Valli, I could depend on Ellora to be suspicious of other people.
“Is there anyone living here who might have done it?”
“Hmm… I doubt anyone here would take it. Everyone knows Valli wears flowers. It would be obvious they stole it if anyone saw it.”
“If it was taken during the show would anyone else have been able to come back here?”
“Sure. They wouldn’t have a reason to, but it’s pretty chaotic during a performance. Someone could have snuck over here.”
I paused to think it over. “But then, Valli’s room is pretty far from the hallway connecting it to the theater. That’s a pretty long way to walk just to take a hair stick.”
“We make pretty good money, but there’s also a lot of staff here who don’t earn that much. Maybe one of them thought they’d find expensive stuff to steal.”
She had the mind of a thief.
“You’re right. I’ll see if anyone else is missing anything. Speaking of which, are you?”
“I haven’t noticed anything.”
“All right. I’ll check with everyone else, then.”
It was better than asking everyone if they’d stolen the hair stick. I turned to the room on the opposite side of the hallway and knocked. Another one of the dancers opened the door.
“Hi, something of Valli’s was taken off his desk and I’m checking to see if anyone else is missing anything…”
I went down the hall asking everyone if anything was missing or they knew anything. There were nine rooms on each side of the hall, making eighteen total. No one else had anything taken or knew about his hair stick.
When I went back to Valli’s room I held onto his door frame, leaning slightly inside of his room. “No one else seems to know anything. Is it possible you left it in one of the dressing rooms and forgot?”
“I remember leaving it on my desk like I always do, but I guess it’s possible.”
“It makes the most sense to me. Let’s check to make sure.”
The theater had two large dressing rooms. We went into the closer – and larger – one first. Mirrors with lights over them covered the walls on both sides. It had sinks built in and accessories sitting all over the counters. Dozens of seats were scattered about. A pair of racks full of costumes still sat in the middle of the room.
We searched the counters for his hair piece. Thin layers of powder dusted the countertops randomly. Red and black powder rubbed off onto my hand when I touched them. I peeked under the counters and in the sinks, and while I found many knick-knacks that had been left behind I didn’t see his stick. With no sign of it, we moved on to the second dressing room. It wasn’t as gargantuan as the first but I could still imagine dozens of people running around in it.
When I reached the last section of counter we still hadn’t found it.
“Doesn’t look like it’s in here.” I faced him as he finished searching the other side of the room.
He folded his hands and his gaze dropped to the ground. My ears sagged. I hated to disappoint him.
I forced a smile. “I guess we could check around the theater. It’s possible someone dropped it?”
We began scouring the rest of the theater and I got a closer look at everything that existed behind the scenes. There were lots of little rooms I’d never been in, even showers.
After looking through numerous rooms I opened one of the doors to the stage and pushed through the curtains. The stage was massive, with layers upon layers of drapes drawn to the sides. A ladder was set up on the other side of the stage but no one was on it. The audience seating seemed to flow forever. A section of the stage divided the seats and stretched all the way to the back.
The lights flashed on and flooded the room. Between each sheet a stream of light poured through. I jumped behind the curtains and stood still. Soft footsteps came through the door.
When I saw Valli’s feet on the other side of the curtain I grabbed him. He jumped, crying out and tensing up.
I roared and shook him. He planted his feet apart to keep his balance and struggled to free his arms.
After a moment I let go and peeked around the curtain. He laughed, steadying himself. I snapped the curtain back in place and fled. Shielding my head with an arm, I shoved the thick drapes aside. Valli’s soft steps followed behind me.
Hopping out of them onto the stage, I checked behind me. He was working his way out of drapery. I dove back in and raced through. When I reached the wall he popped out from behind the other side of the curtain. Laughing, I leaned on the wall, pausing to catch my breath. He panted, a hand covering his mouth.
A puffball on the ground caught my eye. It was wedged against the wall. I inched closer passed Valli and bent over to get a better look. The ball was made of yellow and golden petals, forming a fluffy circular flower. The stick attached to it was resting in a crevice in the wooden floor.
I squatted down in front of it. “Hey, I think I found your stick.”
“You did?”
The stick part was a golden brown at the top, but a dingy brown glop covered the bottom. Some sort of crusty gunk. As Valli bent over next to me I held a hand up to stop him.
“There’s something on it. Do you have something to pick it up with?”
“I can get something.”
He scuttled out the door and came back a couple minutes later with a plastic bag. Covering my hand with it, I lifted it up for a better look.
“Yeah, there’s definitely something all over the stick. It looks like a bit is on the edge of the flower, too.”
I straightened up and held it so he could see. His figure drooped and he pouted. Too bad I didn’t find it in better condition.
“Maybe it can be washed off?” I suggested, though I doubted he would want to put something dirty like this in his hair again.
“It’s all right. I guess we should just throw it out.”
We took it back to his room, where I tossed it in his trash bin and went about the day. The mystery of where his hair stick had gone was solved.
Still, how did it get there and why was it dirty?

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The Black Cane


The Black Cane (Dowager Diaries Book 1)

Synopsis:
The decision to help one small boy turns eight elderly women’s lives upside-down. Danger becomes a way of life. If the women are going to save the boy and stay alive, they are going to have to use skills that have been dormant way too long.

I received a free copy of this book in exchange for a non-reciprocal review.
(There will be spoilers).

I was excited to read this book. A group of elderly ladies who play bridge together become detectives? I was all in.

There are several cases handled in the book besides the main one which I liked. I also like that the main case was mostly wrapped up by the end of the book. I was worried that, like many series, it would end on a cliffhanger to try and draw readers back. I don’t like that. I prefer a complete story in one book, even if it connects to other books. Instead of dragging on the main story with Marc, it starts up a new mystery that will be continued in the next book.

In general I didn’t find much to dislike about the characters save for Marc. He got better as the story went on, possibly because he took a backseat in the story, but when he first showed up he read more like a caricature than a child to me.

I liked Amelia and may have been a little biased because she was a translator. Most of the characters were fine, though there are quite a few and they didn’t all have time to be developed. That’s all right in a case like this where a few characters can be focused on in one book and a few others can be focused on in the next. I’ve only read the first book, though, and I could honestly only name a few of the members off the top of my head, so I hope the others each get a chance to have the spotlight in the future.

As far as the writing, this book came off like a nice rough draft to a story. There were a lot of errors I caught, mostly missing quotation marks or grammatical errors.

Examples: “There was lots of good-natured complaint about the luck of the cards…”
“If it were reasonable…”
“When she completed that chore. she and Darlene had time…”

On top of that, the prose could get repetitive. There’s a lot of:
XX said, “Hi.”
YY said, “The weather is nice today.”
ZZ said, “I don’t feel comfortable speaking.”

I know it’s better to use ‘said’ than browse through a thesaurus and throw in weird words, but there was little variation in how a lot of the dialogue was put together.

A good editor could have helped correct the errors as well as smooth out some plot points. Overall I liked the mysteries they solved but I wish some things had been addressed, like how people were hearing about the club. It seemed strange that someone like a school boy they had never met would know about them and I would have liked an explanation. There were also pieces of dialogue that could have been fixed up, like:

“A retired cop could come in handy, because I’m sure there is a crime involved here somewhere.”

This is in response to a child being kidnapped, held hostage, starved and beaten, among other things. The fact that she seems unsure about there being a crime involved sounds off.

I know it’s expensive for an indie author to hire an editor, but I think it would be worth it. There’s a lot of good ideas here that just need polished.

In the end, I give it a 6/10. Good ideas are nice, but presentation is important, too, and I hope the author finds the resources to work some more on this book.

About the Author:
From living off the grid in the Arizona desert, Eileen has moved to the woods of upstate New York. She has authored a standalone adventure novel called Desert Shadow. She is also the author of Alicia Trent Series. The Black Cane : Dowager Diaries Book 1 is her latest release.

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Cave of Journeys


Cave of Journeys

I received a free copy of this book in exchange for a non-reciprocal review.
(There will be spoilers).

“Cave of Journeys” is a very clean read with a lot of information packed into it. If you’re looking for something safe for kids, there’s absolutely nothing unsavory in here. This is the kind of book where the characters are constantly saying “please”, “thank you” and apologizing when they do something that might be considered rude.

I think another reviewer pretty much summed up the main issue the book has: a lack of conflict. There’s never any tension. The only time there was a tense moment – when the tree became mad at them – it was resolved in about a page. It never feels like there’s anything at stake and everyone always gets along. There’s no danger and barely any disagreements.

It also needed editing. For example:

“When it did tell time proudly displayed it for all to see.”
“He repeated his maneuvers repeatedly…”

There’s also a spot where I felt like a line was meant to be deleted but got left in.

“”…Young man, do you have any questions?” the Elder asked Mattie.
“I like your stories. You make them easy to understand.”
Mattie thought for a moment. “Nope, I don’t have any questions yet.””

The middle line felt out of place. “Then” and “than” are also mixed up constantly in the book. Sometimes they’re used correctly, and then they’ll be used incorrectly several times, so the book is in need of an editor.

A lot of the book is basically characters talking to each other about history, respect, and other lessons. They’re not bad morals to take in or anything, but it is rather exposition-heavy. There also wasn’t really an explanation for a lot of things (like why the main characters were the ones picked to go on the journey. There wasn’t anything they did that couldn’t be done by anyone else).

I’m not sure if the book would hold a child’s attention because of the lack of conflict, but it is an innocent enough read and it might. It could be a nice introduction to Native American beliefs if they were interested in it, and it certainly has plenty of nice values to teach them and a lot of information. It didn’t keep my attention very well because I need more tension in what I read, but if one of the kids enjoyed it that wouldn’t bother me at all.

I’d say it wouldn’t hurt to see if your kids enjoy this book, but it probably wouldn’t hold the attention of many adults.

I give it a 6/10.

Roastmaster


Roastmaster (A Coffee Novel)

I received a free copy of this book in exchange for a non-reciprocal review.
(There will be spoilers).

I’ll have to admit, the style of this novel wasn’t quite for me, though it might work for other people. If you read the beginning and enjoy it, you’ll probably enjoy the rest of the book.

The changing of tenses was jarring for me. Not only did chapters switch from past tense to present tense, but then there would also be a spattering of “this would happen, that would happen” thrown in there. Sometimes we’d start a chapter with Capri sitting around in present tense and suddenly be talking about something she did last week/month/year. I get what the author was going for with “Capri” being the current story and “John Mallory” being the story from the past, but I wish the tenses had been kept the same.

If this book were a piece of art, I’d say it’s an “abstract painting”. Sometimes things make sense in it, and other times it has the most bizarre descriptions of what’s going on. With how often Machu was described as having a big round head like the moon I could have easily pictured moon from Majora’s Mask sitting atop his neck.

There were odd things like, “She looked up as if she saw a morpho blue butterfly” (just an example based on my memory, it might not be written exactly like that). It left me wondering if there’s a specific way people are supposed to look when they see a morpho blue butterfly. At parts it was very confusing.

In much the same way, sometimes the dialogue was very strange and it would be hard to imagine people actually talking like that.

That said, that doesn’t mean this is a bad book. There’s definitely an interesting story there. John Mallory’s transition from American life to life in Costa Rica was done pretty well. I was actually convinced she didn’t want to leave by the end. A lot of the characters are likeable, and they weren’t stuck in a state of “having to do everything right” or “having to do everything wrong”. Everyone was all over the place in doing right and wrong.

My best suggestion would be to read a preview and see if it’s a style you like, because it keeps the same style throughout.

I give it about a 7/10.

Life, Everlasting


Life, Everlasting

I received a free copy of this book in exchange for a non-reciprocal review.
(There will be spoilers).

After finishing the book, I have to say Theresa and Gino make the story for me. Peter is all right. I felt like a lot of his stuff was just there, although there is some payoff at the end.

But Theresa and Gino are great characters. They feel real, and the way they handle their son’s death is portrayed very well. How they treat and feel about each other is realistic, too. They feel like a couple who has been apart much of their life, and who are trying to adjust to living together. While they don’t hate each other or anything, they do have some resentments over their choices. And even though they’re detached from each other there is still a hint of something there.

I liked when Theresa worried that Gino would get upset if she spent money on herself, and being pleasantly surprised when he seemed okay with it. Gino seemed like the type who didn’t talk a lot but he still wanted to support her.

There were parts that offered too many details. For example, discussions about whether to go to X restaurant or Y restaurant. I also never felt like I really knew much about their family in the afterlife. They were mostly a bunch of names for me, while I did get some impressions of the people who were still living.

But overall, I found Theresa and Gino to be great, deep characters going through an incredibly hard situation. I really wanted them to be okay in the end because they both seemed like they deserved it. I liked how they could be detached, but neither was ever portrayed as being horribly wrong or something – they just made some different life choices that the other didn’t agree with.

For example, Gino serving in the military for so long, which kept him away from his family. On the other hand, Theresa constantly letting people mooch off of her and giving away their money. Neither was a bad person but you could understand why they would get irritated.

It’s a touching book. I’d recommend it for anyone who is looking for a somewhat sad story of a family dealing with the grief of a lost son.

I’d give it an 8 out of 10.

Kindle Empire


I WON’T be linking to this book.

I received a free copy of this book in exchange for a non-reciprocal review.

One of the first things I noticed about this book was the formatting. The pages all bleed into each other, so the first chapter immediately bleeds into the second chapter, etc. There’s also weird spacing after a lot of stuff, as if someone hit return to space it out instead of using page breaks. It’s not the first time I’ve read an indie book that has done this, but I never really mentioned it before. The reason I bring it up this time is because this is a book about creating kindle books, so I expect it to look good.

The table of contents is a mess. There’s big paragraphs in it, as well as tons of links with “(Untitled)”.

Right at the beginning there’s some images proving that the author earns as much as the book proclaims.
I was a little confused because all of the books the author has available are under $4. So, let’s be generous and say he was making $2 per book sold. He’d have to sell about 7,000 books a month to make the $14,000.
I noticed his books on their rankings seem to be on average somewhere around #90,000 to #100,000, which means he’s selling a few copies, but based on my experience I’d expect them to rank a lot higher if he’s selling that many. I don’t know, it seemed off to me.

It did feel repetitive and like there was a lot of unneeded information. It started off with explaining what a kindle is. The problem with that is that if someone is reading the ebook – likely on a kindle or similar device – they probably don’t need to be told what it is. Likewise, if someone is reading a book about successfully publishing on the kindle, they probably don’t need pages and pages about something like “Why kindles are popular”.
It reminded me a bit of a forensic book I once bought that decided that it was necessary to provide the reader with definitions to things like ‘murderer’.

Then I noticed that in the few pages I’d read it felt like I’d seen some of the same things more than once.

Example:
At 6%:
“If you try to publish in the traditional way, then you might have to wait for months and years to get your manuscript approved and to get a good deal in publishing the book. In the world of publishing, the more you wait, the more money you lose.”

At 10%:
“One of the biggest advantages of Kindle publishing lies in the fact that you will not have to be at the mercy of publishing houses to get your book published. This is a huge benefit as losing time is equal to losing money in the publishing world.”

At 91%:
“The biggest advantage of Kindle publishing lies in the fact that you will not have to be at the mercy of publishing houses to get your book published. So you do not lose unnecessary time and money over such publishing efforts.”

That’s right. I may have even missed one or two, but this is a short book and there’s three examples of it repeating the exact same thing, sometimes almost word for word. It repeats A LOT.

At 19% there’s a big list of ‘example articles’ which are then repeated on the very next page.

I also found it odd that at 12% there’s a graph demonstrating why it’s a good idea to write romance ebooks, because people prefer their romances as ebooks. Why? Because at the bottom of the list was cookbooks, where people vastly prefered those to be printed over ebook versions. And the author is saying that he sells so many ebooks, and almost all of the ebooks he has available are about cooking.
When he gets to talking about cookbooks, he puts up a list of places to take recipes from. Not just the text, but the images, too. People own the rights to their work, so I can’t agree with taking it. The images, as well. Someone took that image and someone owns the right to that image, you can’t just take it and profit off of it. The people who create that work deserve credit and pay for their work.
I can say that if I was reading a book and saw someone using images I had commissioned for my book, I would not be happy.

There were also errors:
“…I am going to show you publishing hot bestseller books and I have break that method…”

“At this point, you should have book with you.”

At one point it threw this out:
“Don’t put a bunch of PLR stuff together.”

But the book didn’t mention PLR or what it was earlier.

A lot of times the book just tells you to go somewhere else, like this:

“If you want formatting tips, it’s available on amazon.com.”

This book is FULL of lists of links that could probably easily be found online.

Also, it showed more examples later on in the book of the author’s success. The problem? The author blacks out all of the parts that would show what book it is. I could easily snap a screenshot of a bestseller, cover the ASIN, and pretend that I’m the #1 bestseller. I have no idea why the author would hide this information if they had books that were bestsellers.

I have a lot of major problems with this book. Of course, encouraging theft and plagiarism is at the top. It’s formatted poorly, has a lot of errors (poor grammar/missing commas or periods/etc) and encourages a lot of copying and pasting of other people’s work. This book was published on Jun 6, 2014. It has 63 5-star reviews (Jun 24, 2014). Need I say more about that? This book pads out its few pages by repeating a lot of the same things over and over.

As a matter of fact, take a look at this: http://www.amazon.com/dp/B00J19FBR8/ref=pdp_new_dp_review

Compare it with this book’s page: http://www.amazon.com/dp/B00KU7OLXA/ref=pdp_new_dp_review

Look a little familiar? Looks like the author published essentially the same thing twice.

All of this got me wondering, so I did a little more research.
So here we go:
From this book: “The Ninja Secret That Will Allow You To Create Bestselling Kindle Books Without Having To Lift A Finger”
Look what I found over here (http://www.amazon.com/Kindle-Buster-Formula-Publishers-Success-ebook/dp/B00JUAJSNQ): “The ninja tactic that will allow you to create bestselling kindle books without having to lift a finger.”

From this book: “He has opened doors again to his Kindle 1-on-1 Coaching Class for a very limited time for $100 per hour. Muhammad will be raise the price to $1000 per hour once he get 5 students.”
Over here ( http://www.amazon.com/Kindle-Money-Mastery-Publishing-Revealed-ebook/dp/B00DVWSR40 ): “It not only works for myself, but the many other people that have been through this program. People have paid me over $1800 ($300/hour) to learn this information from me through 1-on-1 coaching on my blog, …”

This book: “Take action today and buy this book so you can start making passive income online through my Kindle publishing method for a limited time discount.”
Other book: “If you want to learn how to make passive income online from Amazon Kindle Publishing, then you absolutely cannot miss out on downloading this book!”

This book: “Simply click the “buy” button on this page and you’ll easily be able to read this book from your computer, Kindle device, tablet or smart phone.”
Other book: “Simply click the “buy” button on this page and you’ll easily be able to read Kindle Money Mastery from your computer, Kindle device, tablet or smart phone.”

It even offers a bonus video just like the other book.

So, there’s more than a little bit about this book that’s suspect. I’m sorry, I couldn’t rate this more than 1/10.

The Book of Deacon


The Book of Deacon

This review will contain spoilers.

I enjoyed this book a lot. Myranda, the main character, is a pretty decent to follow. At first she’s only trying to survive. The northern countries where she lives have been in a perpetual war with the southern country. She wanders from place to place just trying to keep her stomach full enough. After she finds a campsite where the man had died, she happens upon his sword and it leaves a mark on her. Her only thoughts for the sword are to sell it so that she could have her basic needs met, but soon she’s being hunted down by her own country.

She meets a malthrope named Leo, one of the first people she’s been able to talk to freely since she was a child because she’s seen as a sympathizer with the enemy. Malthropes are seen as wicked creatures, so Leo, too, is unwelcomed by the world.

There can be a bit much of Myranda stumbling onto things, but it wasn’t enough to bother me. There were also a few occasions where Myranda had an odd opinion that I didn’t understand.

For example, maybe halfway through the book, she ends up in a secret village kept hidden from the rest of the world. Until then she’d been trudging through constant snow, barely surviving from city to city, didn’t trust the people around her, and everyone pretty much looked the same because most people wore the exact same color of cloak. She was barely surviving and had no friends.

When she arrives in the village it’s a safe haven from the outside world and it has all kind of color to it. But when Deacon tells her how difficult it is to get back out and seems content with staying there, she starts complaining how sad that is. It didn’t make sense to me. She only just got to safety from a world she had no particular reason to be fond of. People were trying to kill her all the time. Why would her immediate thoughts about the village be about how awful it must be to live there your whole life?

It felt almost like she had those thoughts just for the sake of being contrary. I thought it would have seemed more natural if she thought it was the greatest place in the world for awhile, and then changed her mind after being there for awhile and finding that most of the people were only concerned with learning. There was a lot she could have been disillusioned by.

The romance between Myranda and Deacon is close to non-existent. I actually like this. She doesn’t even meet him until about halfway through the book, and when she does there’s no obsession over how the other looks or anything. They start talking a lot and spending a lot of time together as Deacon explains things in the village to her and supports her.

I think Deacon made a surprisingly good romantic interest because he’s so lacking in the ways of romance. His entire life he’s lived in a village that’s all about learning and less about friends. He’s awkward and obsessive about his books, but he’s cordial and supportive of Myranda the entire time. The fact that Myranda was going to him for help and to talk to made sense. Their friendship didn’t feel forced at all, and it was easy to see how both could be drawn to the other – Deacon because it might be his first time having an actual friend in a long time, and Myranda because she’s been so alone in a hostile world.

Deacon doesn’t even seem to be aware of his shift in interests, which makes sense. He’s lived in the village without much in the way of friends, but the people there aren’t particularly hostile towards him, so becoming friends with Myranda would be a more subtle change in his life than in Myranda’s.

They have some differences in views. Deacon firmly believes what he’s been taught in the village, and thinks fate will happen on its own so they can just sit and wait for things to fix themselves. Myranda, on the other hand, thinks she needs to play a more active role in fate.

Overall, I think it was worth a read and I’d recommend it to someone who enjoys a nice fantasy novel. It took a little bit to get into, but I’m rating it based on the fact that I was invested by the end and would continue reading. I’d give it about a 9/10